LESSON
3
WRITING
"FAMILIAR" LYRICS
BE
FAMILIAR
A
familiar lyric
is one in
which the songwriter has succeeded in pulling
the listener into an
imaginary world that feels completely
real. The singer feels that the song is describing a
situation that
they've either encountered before, or could easily encounter in their
future. Being
familiar is being real.
Familiar
text means that you
try to word things using common every day
language. In most languages, there is a "written way" of communicating,
and an "oral way." And the way we write things is not necessarily the
way we say things.
Written text can sometimes
have a formality that oral text doesn't have or need.
When
you write lyrics, you
may want to write them like they are poetry,
and this can be good especially if you, as the writer, wish to maintain
a certain emotional distance from the listener. But if you really want
to snag the listener, and make them feel that the song could also be
about them, you'll want to
use more familiar, informal, emotion-driven text.
Compare
these examples of
formal, sometimes stiff, text versus informal, familiar text:
- FORMAL:
When I
arise...
INFORMAL:
When I
wake up in the morning...
- FORMAL:
My heart
sings for
your heart...
INFORMAL:
I love
you!
- FORMAL:
It hurts
me to know...
INFORMAL: It tears me up...
- FORMAL:
It
amused me...
INFORMAL: I laughed...
- FORMAL:
I hope
that you
understand...
INFORMAL:
I need
you to see...
Keep
in
mind that all the
examples of so-called formal text are
actually possible lines from songs that can work very well. But if you
want to get to the grass-roots listener, opt for the informal rather
than the formal.
TELL
THE
WHOLE STORY, NOT JUST
THE EFFECT
If
all
you do is constantly
tell your listener how you're feeling about
something, you're going to leave the listener feeling empty. It's not
enough to write songs about your emotions. You need to tell
them a
story, something that they can relate to. In very important ways, the
listener needs to feel that your
story is their story.
Do
lyrics need to rhyme? Not
always, but often. Rhyming is part of
infusing a sense of form into the song. Form is vital. Form is what
demonstrates a beginning, middle and end to your song. You can read
more about lyrics and form in "The
Essential
Secrets of Songwriting."
ACTIVITIES
for WRITING "FAMILIAR" LYRICS
1. Take
the following "formal" text fragments, and write them in a more
familiar way. NOTE: They don't have to rhyme... You're just looking for
ways to loosen up some rather stiff language. Feel free to take what
you're given below and write two or three lines if necessary.
EXAMPLE:
- FORMAL:
I hope
that you
understand...
INFORMAL:
I need
you to see...
i) I'm
going through a difficult time:
____________________________
ii) I got on the bus:
___________________________________
iii) You and I get along so
well: _______________________________
iv) My troubled mind kept me
from sleeping: _____________________
v) The task is complete:
_______________________________
vi) The turmoil was
distracting: ______________________________
vii) Trust in me: ______________________________
viii) Alcohol is not the answer: _______________________________
ix) I miss the good times: ___________________________________
x) I'm exhausted: ______________________________
2. Write four-line lyrics that gets the following ideas across:
i) I'm trying to do my work, but I am distracted by the things you said
to me last evening. Frankly, it's taking up all my time trying to sort
out the issues in my life.
______________________________
______________________________
______________________________
______________________________
ii) I
know you are feeling depressed,
but you need to focus on the fact that better days are coming.
______________________________
______________________________
______________________________
______________________________
iii) I want to be a successful business person, and I know that that
means I may have to abandon the things in my life that I love.
______________________________
______________________________
______________________________
______________________________
iv) Who cares if I've got lots of work to do - I want to just sit back
and daydream about the nice times we've had together.
______________________________
______________________________
______________________________
______________________________
...on
to Lesson 4 - WRITING
MELODIES THAT WORK
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